#TankaTuesday #Dodoitsu

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A glacier in my heart,
icy blood, numb arteries
long shadows overwhelm me –
a dreary desert.

***

Trudging through the sands of time,
my feet hold the coarse remnants
a ray of sunshine might help
frozen emotions.

***

Life was a lullaby once
when your gentle hands held me,
when you were my warm blanket –
my beacon of glow.
© Balroop Singh 

Thanks to Robbie and Colleen for the inspiration to write syllabic poetry. The challenge this week is to choose any form of syllabic poem and use at least one metaphor in the poem. I chose to write a string of Dodoitsu.

A Dodoitsu is a Japanese form of poetry that is sometimes performed as a folk song. It has 26 syllables: 7 in the first, second and third lines, and 5 in the last line.(7/7/7/5). No rhyming. No title.

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36 thoughts on “#TankaTuesday #Dodoitsu”

  10. Balroop, your imagery feels both stark and tender—“a glacier in my heart” and “my beacon of glow” seem to bookend the emotional arc with haunting beauty. I really felt the weight of loss and the flicker of memory throughout this string of Dodoitsu.

    Much love,
    David

    1. I am delighted to hear that David. When poetry reaches the heart of the reader, its magic enhances. Thank you so much for sharing your lovely thoughts.

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